In continuing the writing challenge adventure, I’ve chosen to participate in this weekend’s Trifecta Writing Challenge: 33 words written in first person narrative. For more information on the prompt (and Trifecta in general) please visit their website.
Now, for your enjoyment and reflection:
Within the Moment- A Trifecta Writing Challenge
Eyes touch and caress each other across a crowded room engorging my mind with a rush of forbidden thoughts that quickly flutter away to await another dream-scape when I take my child’s hand.
durned kids always spolil “that” moment. 🙂 Nah, I kid. Nicely done. (looks like you have about 3 more words to play with)
Thank you Barbara! In time feedback:)) Now, it is exactly 33 words. My mind somehow read up to 33 words.
Aww,that’s such a sweet turn of thoughts:-)
Darn kid! I was so enjoying the moment:)) Only kidding. Time with my sons is always the richest! Thanks for the feedback.
that was a well strung set or word my friend …
A chatty fella, I enjoyed the 33 word challenge. Who would have thunk? :)) Thanks for your time and feedback.
Kids can always bring us back to reality.
They sure can. But, I like playing in their world-it’s so refreshing with its innocence.
My niece and nephew are always interrupting my chain of thoughts, so I’m kinda familiar with feelings like this (: You portrayed it brilliantly!
Children have a tendency to do that and, yet, I wouldn’t have it any other way. Well..at least most of the time 🙂 Thanks for your feedback.
I’m pleased you enjoyed it. It was fun to write! Thanks for your feedback!
Nothing like a kid’s hand in yours.
Well, I think everyone has missed the boat on his one! It is the kid who attracted the woman in the first place! I know that I can walk down the streets of my town and garner nary a glance. But,walk those same streets with my three or six year old daughter holding on to my hand and let the blizzard of female attention, smiles and waves begin! Being a loving, attentive Dad is, definitely an aphrodesiac for many women. I say, get this lady’s phone number. Take the child home, have a lovely rest of the day, tuck them in warmly with a kiss. Then, get on that phone and let the courting commence.
Well said! Small children are a magnet no matter the gender. Add a dog and you’ve got it made 🙂 Thanks for your comments. A laugh much needed at this point of my day.